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scriptamanent
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Nicoletta A. Poulakida

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On such nights
« Thread Started on Mar 9, 2008, 3:49pm »

Was it the night of interloping images
inveigling into seeing nothing but the phantom of reality,

Was it the moon, masking this dark confusion
robbing lucidity, this magnetic satellite attracting sanity

Or was it the father figure, shadowy and argentine
with beady eyes, a sleepless crow ruling the roost?

Whatever it may have been it proved that the sky
doesn't embrace only divinity and doesn't claim only saints.

Sometimes, like on that night, it even allows the lord of
abnormity to shape the world accordingly,

And it's not magic, nor a diabolic coincidence
that a bunch of pioneers disappeared during its invisible storm.

There are trees in the wilderness, struck by lightning
that if you dare to look carefully at their interlacing branches

You will find them tilting at mills
reminiscent of pillars of salt, facing the outlying city lights…

written in 2002, edited almost unrecognizably yesterday, included in ezine "wanderingdog" back in 2002, don't know what happened to this ezine, was pretty cool.

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Ross McCague
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Re: On such nights
« Reply #1 on Mar 9, 2008, 4:38pm »

This may be how you say Armageddon in Greek with an elastic tongue, or is it just the shadows that define the grace of God? The cosmic tone is conditioned by that contemporary cinematic image of "the outlying city lights" which suggests the crossroads of the blues or the fading scenes of a film noir. In either case, good and evil are drawn together. Your use of the negative is the most inventive I've ever seen and forms a slide into your mind. The battleground is only suggested, however, as if a warning is being posted for all those concerned with the triumph of divinity.

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Re: On such nights
« Reply #2 on Mar 10, 2008, 12:59am »

I like this a lot Nicoletta, a few things came to mind:

inveigling into - nice, but a phonetic mouthful possibly
that robbed lucidity - tense is repeated (Was should be good enough) and unnecessary (I think) --> robbing lucidity
reminding - maybe 'reminiscent'

all in all though a great read ... enjoyed this.

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