Ross McCague
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|  | Little Girl Lost
« Thread Started on Aug 7, 2007, 2:19pm » | |
(A sketch from memory)
Sheaves of corn under an infinite sky:
Desire forms that endless way for you.
The isolated circumstance of dating and dance
seems so simple and so perfect too,
Not everything can be singled out.
You wear a gold earring as a reminder
what it is to be a startling woman
in a plain-spoken world.
Up late, past the bedtime of the eastern kings:
The stability of a rectangular parlor,
Marriage should hold, sanity, and even love
like a quaint painting in a dusted frame.
What reminder there is of love is found in spring
then birth and rebirth runs the farm as much as men.
The county fair out on a squared field
designated for pies, pigs, pigtails and the arcing of the sun.
The engines throttle so but not those of state:
Did you ever swing out beneath the trees,
Lifting your spirit high and higher?
Apron tossed aside, dress askew,
Mimicking the motion of the overruling sun.
You must have seen children,
A man dreaming in a cocoon,
The future about to spread its overarching wings.
We still need to swing, lie out under those unfenced skies
to know what is, what isn’t, and what just might be.
Far above the rectangular states drawing out time
and lengthening the neatly polished graves,
I see an urban girl, head turned to one side,
A single earring pierced,
The chiaroscuro of a Vermeer:
The light from the window is such,
She might well be reading the finished script.
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« Reply #1 on Aug 7, 2007, 9:45pm » | |
Ross, so glad to see your poetry in the forum, this one of course I recognize as being from the the 'Season of Stealth', there are a lot of really great things going in this write, more than I have to time to comment on tonight though as I have only one eye open at the moment lol but I will coming back to this shortly as well your other works posted here.
I noticed you are commenting on other poems, you are most welcome to speak your mind in the submissions area as well and any hosted area where the poet has posted their policy on crits, there are no rules for reciprocation and no post-to-comment ratios, so a warm welcome to you from the Modern Poet Online and hope you enjoy what is going on here.
regards,
Bernie
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Ross McCague
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« Reply #2 on Aug 9, 2007, 8:48am » | |
Thanks. This is one of my most successful poems. I did something right or the conditions were right. Don't feel you have to study the work closely. I like having a few readers.
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« Reply #3 on Mar 10, 2008, 9:30pm » | |
Ross I meant to bump this up months ago, in fact I was reviewing the gallery and looking for it, so late as ever (as everything with me these days) up she goes ...
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« Reply #4 on Mar 23, 2008, 8:31am » | |
It's a good bump Bernie, glad to see this up top as it is a wonderful thought provoking read with great imagery and language.
Enjoyed Ross!!
Smiles!
Bobby
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| | Re: Little Girl Lost
« Reply #5 on Mar 27, 2008, 8:00pm » | |
Hi Bobby. This is essentially a portrait of a young woman living in Iowa near the Mississippi River. I tried to work several perspectives and project as much as I could into what little I know about her life there. I'm pleased you enjoyed it, Ross.
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