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Sunburn
Mar 30, 2008 22:23:37 GMT -5
Post by Ivan Carswell on Mar 30, 2008 22:23:37 GMT -5
That day in the sun never ended – stays etched in memory precociously intact, gilded strands kept under lock and key.
Blue forever stands sentry where sand spilled innocent from pockets shallow filled, the sea sings soft melodies, waves a-shush with sleep... © 30 March 2008, I. D. Carswell
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Sunburn
Mar 31, 2008 11:47:35 GMT -5
Post by Dunstan Attard on Mar 31, 2008 11:47:35 GMT -5
Exquisite last two lines
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Sunburn
Mar 31, 2008 16:57:53 GMT -5
Post by Ivan Carswell on Mar 31, 2008 16:57:53 GMT -5
Thanks Duncan - it eases the sunburn!
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Sunburn
Apr 1, 2008 20:55:32 GMT -5
Post by Bernard Alain on Apr 1, 2008 20:55:32 GMT -5
S2 is a poem in itself Ivan and a great read, the sibilance works really well here
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