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Post by Don Schaeffer on Sept 25, 2009 5:50:49 GMT -5
Repeatedly, she lets a stream of mucous drop from her mouth then sucks it back. It is the sucking it back that makes it bad.
The easterly bus is crowded when I head home but I get a less than comfortable seat. There is something wrong with the woman in front. The vision that taints her haunts me.
Repeatedly, she lets a stream of mucous drop from her mouth then sucks it in. It is the sucking it in that makes it like a crime.
I wonder if this woman was a regular person or one of those workshop attendees who take this bus. Regular people don't commit such crimes.
I don't want to be near her. She sits in the front next to a red-beared man who runs his hand over her arm and caresses her face. There is something wrong with him.
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Post by Ivan Carswell on Sept 25, 2009 7:15:42 GMT -5
I cannot let this pass Don. It is brilliant!
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Post by leecrowell on Sept 25, 2009 13:34:19 GMT -5
too real for comfort and the effect is acheived, leaving me apalled that someone created art from disgust, leave it to Don
(oh, check the spelling on "beared", should it be bearded?)
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Post by Don Schaeffer on Sept 25, 2009 17:35:50 GMT -5
Is this the most disgusting poem you ever read or what? Lol
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