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Post by leecrowell on May 10, 2010 23:28:12 GMT -5
if this man will take it down he will burn it down and love it down
he's been consumed in some ugly ways he was laid out in the sun to dry but he feels no shame for his twisted roots he just wants you to hear his song it doesn't need any sense just a crossfire pick and a stuttering strum on a five string chord there's not much to say until he starts to play and then he flaunts his thing like a maestro king and he takes it down like a thunderstorm
take it down he will take it down burn it to the ground and love it down
everyone watches Abigail as she glides inside her thin silk gown she knows how to move and she knows just what you see when she gets down on her knees to unravel the mystery of your boyhood dream she held the perfect pitch to take him down he crumbled to the floor with his head up in the clouds and he could shake most anything except his need to take it down
he sang a soldier's song crying in the night he echoed hunger for a way back home the young ones crawled out from cover and the sergeants laid down their guns to reflect on the purpose and the cause in rhythmic drift across the field moving closer to the blaze let your face flush red fill it to your lungs and take it down
take it down he will take it down burn it to the ground and love it down
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Post by Nick Harris on May 11, 2010 8:55:45 GMT -5
I like it. You've come a long way, Lee. This one has soul and passion.
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Post by Bernard Alain on May 11, 2010 16:14:37 GMT -5
I like this very much lee, having been a musician for many years the refrains make thiis read like a blues tune, one question though ... five string chord, is this intended to suggest a banjo is being played? like maybe bluegrass ... curious but enjoyed the read
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Post by Don Schaeffer on May 12, 2010 8:00:11 GMT -5
This is nothing short of a masterpiece.
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Post by leecrowell on May 13, 2010 16:08:11 GMT -5
Ouch! Just fell off my seat from these generous responses. Nick, Bernard, Don - the fact that this piece left impressions on you makes it all worthwhile for me. So, Mr. Alain is also a musician. Doesn't surprise me at all Bernard, I can see you as a blues bassist or guitar man, maybe some keyboard also. I'll bet you like to dab in jazz too, perhaps with a little Miles Davis influence. What you picked up here is that this poem/song was actually two pieces I combined into one. After attending a David Grisman performance last year I started a bluegrass write, and later combined it with some blues lyrics I'd been working with. A 'stuttering strum on a five string chord' is how I describe the sound of great banjo playing. I envy your musicianship. I can't play a lick on any instrument, I sound like a sick cow when I try my best to sing, but I love music - mostly folk, blues, jazz, bluegrass.
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Post by Ivan Carswell on May 14, 2010 19:56:34 GMT -5
Great poem! No problems with the disclaimer either Lee, reads like a two-part harmony for the dyslectic jazz muse. Keep than golden pen in motion man...
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