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Post by Dunstan Attard on Feb 18, 2012 2:37:03 GMT -5
She tells him she can not stand his moaning about the pain he feels,for she has her own pain to deal with and prefers to do it in the routine of a 40 year marriage.
She would rather that he whitewashes the basement, arrange the flower-pots in the yard and paint the front door before summer sets in.
He wonders how he can look at his pain all on his own, and wonders what colour would best suit the front door, seeing that he never entered the house through the front window except for the one time when he had locked his keys inside.
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Post by Don Schaeffer on Feb 18, 2012 11:31:19 GMT -5
I really like the long lines. You make the case with this. I can hear the throatiness in your voice. "would rather prefer" seems clumsy though. Do you need the "prefer"?
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Post by Dunstan Attard on Feb 19, 2012 6:16:02 GMT -5
thank you don. as always reading your lines that often open on the wide spaces of narrow alleys with the relish of the complicated process of being alive.
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