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Post by Ivan Carswell on Mar 1, 2012 17:56:34 GMT -5
not getting dressed in a uniform used to suggest you didn’t care; no use explaining where you‘re at – prosaic jury’s out & passing sentence
prosaic – colourless, banal, dull, mundane, characterless: hardly you you’d say aggrieved but it’ll have to do – that’s what it is for the rest of your life
unless you move; a bizarre but colourful group of eccentrics is now home & their mark’s even weirder than non-conformity – where being diverse is an art
it doesn’t work either, unity is a misspelled word which probably means you didn’t think of it first and of course therefore have to agree to not use it
but, you protest, that’s being as nebulous as – or more dogmatic than conforming to chronologies of nonsense – you’re agreeing to disagree © 29 February 2012, I. D. Carswell
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Post by Don Schaeffer on Mar 2, 2012 9:35:01 GMT -5
The charm of this is the spiel--non-stop ramblings, the key to which we don't understand. I think it has a very effective start in that witty idea about uniforms. I like the last verse least. I don't like the advise tone. It sums up like the end of a bad mystery. I would delete the last verse. Good work. Good to see you.
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Post by Ivan Carswell on Mar 4, 2012 3:11:33 GMT -5
I certainly cannot disagree with that seminal observation - and re-reading it now 'see the light' too! Thanks Don, lot of learning still to do...
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Post by Dunstan Attard on Mar 15, 2012 6:17:11 GMT -5
i enjoy this prose/verse style that reaches into the mind with personal energy and life experience
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