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Post by John Yamrus on Jun 24, 2007 1:22:36 GMT -5
Brandi spells her name
with an "i" and she dots the i with a circle and sometimes with a heart.
she drives a red ’77 Honda that needs tires and a brake job.
she’s two years out of high school, with a kid,
and she lives with her mother who drinks more often than not.
she could have been married once, but he left.
now, she drives to work every day in the Honda, wearing jeans and sneakers and a shirt.
and when she gets there, she changes into a white tube top, a skirt and nylons and heels,
and she gives hand jobs for a living, in a place that pretends it’s a gym.
but it doesn’t matter, anyway, because her name’s not Brandi,
it’s Susan,
and every now and then her mother gets sober, and she really does love that kid.
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Post by Bernard Alain on Jul 2, 2007 21:38:05 GMT -5
another great write John, once again it identifies with the reader using very specific images. A clever ending and unexpected as it appears to be revealing the flipside during the read. The timing and delivery was perfect. Enjoyed the read.
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Post by John Yamrus on Jul 3, 2007 7:34:37 GMT -5
thanks for all yr kind words on my stuff. i really appreciate it. i'd like to wish you much success on the site here. what you're doing takes a lot of hard work and dedication. you're a good man. john
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